“火車一路向北,窗外景色從南方的溫婉漸變為北方的遼闊。”
“鐵軌銹成了記憶里的虛線,故鄉洇成了底片上的殘影。”
“車廂里親切熟悉的方言,和著車輪與鐵軌摩擦聲,混響成一首懷舊的歌謠。”
近日,在浙江杭州丁蘭實驗中學讀初三的學生張瀟冉,以一篇名為《舊軌還鄉》的作文火爆全網。在她沉靜的朗讀中,真摯的文字靜靜流淌,讓無數網友沉醉其中。
A touching essay by Zhang Xiaoran, a ninth-grade student at Dinglan Experimental Middle School in Hangzhou, Zhejiang province, has taken the internet by storm. Her serene narration and sincere prose, brimming with nostalgia, have moved countless netizens to tears.
有網友評價,作文里“句句不提鄉愁,句句皆是鄉愁”,還有人說:“聽完這篇寒假作文想家了!”“心底埋藏的故鄉瞬間被喚醒”……
Readers praised the essay for "never mentioning homesickness yet embodying it in every line." Comments flooded in: "This winter break assignment made me miss home!" and "It instantly reawakened the hometown buried deep in my heart."
這篇作文是如何構思出來的?背后有著怎樣的故事?
感人作文??
源自真實歸鄉經歷
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將張瀟冉朗讀作文的視頻發到網上的,是她的語文老師王楊軍。去年寒假,他給同學們布置了作文作業,開學后開始陸續批改。看到張瀟冉這篇作文的時候,他頓時眼前一亮。
Zhang's Chinese teacher, Wang Yangjun, shared her reading of the essay online. Last winter break, he had assigned his students to write an essay, and upon grading them, Zhang's work immediately stood out.
乘務員推著小車,叫賣著各種商品。年輕人大多置之不理,他們便將目標轉向了年邁的老人。但無論推銷員的言辭多么天花亂墜、充滿誘惑,那位爺爺始終不為所動。然而,當推銷員隨口一句“孩子愛吃”,他就毫不猶豫地掏了錢,一筆莫名其妙的生意就這樣心甘情愿地成交了。
——《舊軌還鄉》
王楊軍說,這篇作文的動人之處除了文筆,還在于張瀟冉對生活的細致觀察。“爺爺為孫子蜷縮在臥鋪尾部,孫子掀開窗簾看外面,尤其是爺爺因為一句‘孩子愛吃’就買下商品的細節,都很打動人。”王楊軍說,“我一點都不懷疑它的真實性,沒有觀察真實生活是寫不出來這些文字的。”
而現實中的張瀟冉不像視頻中朗讀作文時那般沉靜,她的臉上洋溢著十幾歲少年的活潑。
提起寫作的過程,張瀟冉說,其實《舊軌還鄉》并沒有什么特別的構思,只是如實記述了寒假回鄉途中在火車上的見聞,這勾起了她兒時的記憶。尤其是一對爺孫的互動讓她很受觸動,于是就記錄了下來,“順便交個寒假作業”。
Wang highlighted that what moved him most was Zhang's keen observation of life. In person, Zhang is far from the composed narrator in the video—her face radiates the exuberance of a typical teenager.
“我家的親戚都在內蒙古,我爸騎馬超級帥!”
張瀟冉出生在杭州,只有逢年過節才回老家內蒙古看望親人。因此,雖然年齡不大,她卻對鄉愁有著深切的體會。提筆時,這份鄉愁就流淌到了文字里。可能正是這種“真實”,讓她的文字更有感染力,也打動了她的語文老師王楊軍。
作文走紅網絡???????????
她更加認識到語文的魅力
王楊軍決定讓張瀟冉在課上做分享,請全班聆聽這份真情,他說這不僅是文筆的熏陶,也是心靈的浸潤。“同學們安安靜靜地聆聽著、感受著,他們對于父母長輩的理解與感恩也在逐漸加深。”他將視頻發布到網絡后,更是打動了萬千網友。
Wang had Zhang share her essay in class, hoping its sincerity would move her peers. "The students listened quietly, absorbing not just the writing but also the emotions—deepening their gratitude for family," he said. When he posted the video online, the response was overwhelming.
有人驚嘆于張瀟冉強大的文字敘事能力:“記憶變成文字展現在眼前,一幕幕如親見。”有人感嘆:“文字的力量震耳欲聾。”還有人勾起了兒時的記憶:“我的爺爺去世八年了,在我小時候,他每次趕集都會給我買泡泡糖……”
而對于作者張瀟冉來說,《舊軌還鄉》的走紅完全出乎自己意料。她平時喜歡寫作,最喜歡的作家是史鐵生,這次經歷也讓張瀟冉更加深刻地感受到,“語文真的是一個可以讓自己抒發真實情緒的工具”。
For Zhang, the essay's fame was unexpected. An avid writer who admires author Shi Tiesheng, she now sees Chinese as more than a subject, "It's a tool to express real emotions."
她的作文是否勾起了你的回憶?你曾怎樣描寫自己的家鄉?歡迎來評論區留言分享。
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編輯:李金昳
來源:央視新聞微信公眾號 杭州電視臺綜合頻道 浙江新聞 潮新聞
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